The only complaints I have for Chapter 2 thus far is the fairly frequent usage of "arse","arsehole", and on one occasion,"arse-pussy". I'm not usually one to nitpick between British and American English, but this... it rankles with me like an unreplaced Glade plugin. It's... disconcerting? No, more like, mood-breaking, to be in the middle of reading through an erotic scene and then suddenly a girl says the word "arse" and now I can't stop reading her lines in the voice of a fucking chimney sweep. You catch my drift, my dude?
Other than that (which, thanks to my recent forays into the exciting world of MV in order to fix the whole face issue earlier, I think I can fix for myself), the quality of the writing has MASSIVELY increased, so much so that I needed formatting to be able to stress just how much better it's gotten. And looking at the game's files, I'm also noticing some marked improvements in your organization; top kek.
Keep up the good work, my friend! I have been with this game since pretty much day 1, and I will be with it until the end. I'll be glad to do whatever I can to help, beyond pledging on Patreon, since I've already done that.
EDIT: jfc, "arse-pussy" three times in quick succession, everybody's a fuckin' chimney sweep