So I gotta say the writing is good, the whole dating your dads ex thing is a bit weird it's like a step away from the mum fantasy but in a directon that's just a bit meh and also removed to the point of pointlessness I guess, the main character isn't even the same guy so it's that he reminds someone of someone else's dad, just feels to the player like a kind of "ok great why are you telling me this... shut up already and get to the relevant bit." So that I'd change but that's a personal preference.
The writing is pretty funny and the intro was even funny, loads of detail, good stuff, just dragged on way too long and then seemed to have absolutely no relevance to the main story when it began, perhaps you'll link them up later or something, I hope so because the sort of feeling so far for a lot of the content was it didn't seem relevant to the main character, both the dad romance and the intro seemed to not really matter at all to the PC's journey through the game. But again really well written, just plot needs some work.
I really like the 2 redheads, definitely my thing, nice inclusion of far too many freckles too which always receives my stamp of approval, I also like the variety of the hot indian lady next door. Waiting to see what happens really but good start and a promise of some good old redhead action.