OK here are my opinions on my first play through... Note not everyone will agree with me and that's fine.
- The introduction is really hard to read. "After a (Booble Earth) trip in this beautiful city" is literally a sentence. My brain is hurting form the poor syntax and grammar.
- Note I think people saying Elpidia is loli needs to look up what loli is. She doesn't look prepubescent at all, body wise looks 17ish. Around 61% of women have a B cup or smaller as full adults, and teenagers would be even smaller while they are still growing. I think the teenagers look like teenagers, and that people have crazy inaccurate images of what teenagers look like. Good job actually.
- Different body sizes and body shapes between adults and teenages. You would be surprised how uncommon that is. BUT all the teenagers have the same body. Give one of the teenagers bigger tits, and another one with thicker thighs. Have some of the teenagers shave, but some should have pubes. I know you have one teen with pubes and slightly bigger boobs, but EVERYONE ELSE has the same body =( Each body should be unique.
- Seems to use images and not animations, which is fine, but there needs to be more images. This game feels stingy on images. Seriouslly feels stingy on images.
- Yeah I do not like the writing style of this author.
- People don't talk or act that way really. Personally it hurts my brain trying to understand this.
- I just don't understand who the main character is. That is a failure of storytelling. Clearly Elpidia is the main character, and this box gimmick is a horrible distraction.
I think this is a fine starter project. It feels very amateurish, but it could be a fun little game. If the creator wants increased market share, I recommend spending more time on the writing. It's more than just Grammar and syntax issues, the characters are acting inhuman, but this isn't a parody so it just doesn't feel right.
Thank you for your feedback.
For text problems: grammar language, formulation, this comes from the translator, I translate from a Latin language into English the formulation is sometimes very bad and the expressions it is a disaster, but I am not able to speak English, I can read it but not speak it.
I can only hope for help from others, but for the moment, I receive very little support then to hope for help...
for the dialogs, on the 4 first version of the game I worked a lot on the interface and neglected the dialogs and even sometimes the graphics, but I have now redone a lot of graphics and I work a lot more on the dialogs now.
I really appreciate what you say about this discrimination that I and Elpidia have experienced.
I saw this loli tag as a real insult to hatred and discrimination.
people on this site have been attacking me with a very great stupidity, racism and hatred all summer long.
Elpidia is called loli, it is not true, she is Latina and Warao, for a girl of Warrao origin she is very tall and for a Latina she is of normal size, this loli tag is discrimination against Latinas and Amerindians, it's racism!
criticism of her small breasts is discrimination and if for elpidia's measurements, Santirosa must be classified in loli then more than half of the games on F95 should be too, so it's injustice.
as far as I'm concerned, in my country the loli is illegal and this tag describes me as a paedophile, it's a real insult to me.
So I thank you very much for your support against this loli tag which is nothing but hatred, discrimination, injustice and insult towards me, Elpidia, the Latinas and Amerindian peoples.
You don't like the 4th wall and almost everyone doesn't like it, so I made it disappear little by little and it's on version 0.7 totally disappeared.
Elpidia is the main character but we follow her in her adventure and influence her choices but all the characters in Santirosa are important, the character lupe or paula, minha are also almost main characters.
I give a lot of importance to what critics like you say because you do it in order to help me improve my game and I always try to improve myself and take into account all the advice you give me.
I'm not an "amateur", I've been working for 11 years in video game development, but I've only worked on gameplay or geometries and I want to become an Indy dev today but as you point out I'm an amateur in Indy and I have a lot of problems and a lot to learn, it's not as easy as I thought.
working with new software because before I used to use the ones I was given, working on a complete development with python that I had never used before, working on graphics, which has nothing to do with the maping I was doing before....
I need to learn a lot and I need your encouragement like the ones you just gave me, rather than the hatred I used to receive.
thank you!
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