Abhai
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yup, shallow as hell..unlike very deep "the visit", or even better a full masterpiece "23 sisters".
better to not waste any more 23sisters visit time here, id say.
better to not waste any more 23sisters visit time here, id say.
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The screenshots are from an earlier version of the game, so I do actually need to change that. Thanks for pointing it out. And There actually will be a harem route, you can look at my latest posts to see more info and detail. The game still has about another year left and has been in development for 2 years already.
Not sure what I can say about the game being shallow. I try to write the best stories and characters I can, and luckily, there are people here who really like the characters. But I understand everyone won't. Thanks for playing and I hope you find a game more to your tastes.
Redmark453
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The game is good and has good character designs except leanne I prefer the previous design was nicer face, the best is Irene fuck if that is a woman bomb but the sex scenes with Irene and Leanne leaves a lot to be desired are very short and with 2 or 3 renders and already finished I do not say you have to have animations if you do not change angle of the renders or different sexual position but the rest is fine the game also do not ask that it be a jewel every Dev goes as he wants. Good Luck Dev
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RareFishSticks
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I wasn't talking about quality of writing, but was questioning amount of content. It "general/preparatory part" felt TOO short, even rushed. When I got to the main choise of route, I was like - "that's it?"
Writing itself is okay-ish and models look good. (esp Zoe and Irene)
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I see. I don't design my games to be long, so I have been telling the story I planned and I don't feel i need to go back and add anything, but you might feel like that because I added an ending screen, which I'm removing next update.
Nothing is changing. You're still helping the girls with their problems, so the "general" route is still going.
Benn Swagger
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Most of romance novel I've read in my younger days always have the same step.
Phase 1 - MC meet the girls, they got close, get intimate(mean get fuck).
Phase 2 - The couple start revealing each other secret/past. Problem appear whether it's about their real character or come 3rd party like ex-lover, or family objection, or one or both already have bf/gf/husband/wife. The relationship are tested.
Phase 3 - Solving the problem, either end with good ending, like getting married, or bad ending, like getting separated. Or horror ending like one side kill the other.
For me, this game still in phase 1 & very very slightly going to phase 2. So it's feel like it's short, or matter of fact it is felt like rushed to ending. There's no phase 2, let alone phase 3. This basically just a slow burner meet & fuck game in the end, fucking them is the destination, the end of the story.
And why I (and others) felt that way, is because from the start to v0.8, this game have good chemistry and we all still thinking it's still building up the plot, only to find later, start from v0.9, the story gonna wrapping up. Only the Step-Milf get fucked and it's now down to single path route that leads to the end.
It's just sad. But your, game your rule. And more sad news for me, your next/other games are not keep it on the family theme.
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Thanks for the feedback. My counter is that you're telling me one way to write a story when there are so many ways. No story should ever be written exactly like another, because each is unique. There are no phases or any specific rules you have to follow. The MC goes home because he cares about his girls, and wants to know how they're doing, and he's been trying to help them from the beginning of the game.
But let's say I write the story the way you say is correct. (Phase 1 - MC gets close with the girls and fucks them)
The opening scene is MC hearing Norah cry on the phone, so he decides to go home and find out her problem. But if I follow your step, I have to rewrite he just goes home and meets the girls and starts messing around with them. Then there's no substance or meaningful time spent together. You are already close with everyone, so there's no real way to get closer, just hanging out. We need to go deeper.
Norah's dream of having a bakery, Leanne's past failure with dance, etc. Helping them with their internal struggles and desires while you get closer is much more meaningful, in my opinion, so you need to know what their problems are from the get-go. And by your own rules, you are starting the game on phase 2, with everyone revealing their secrets.
This is why there is no formula to write.
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SuperWriter please remember not all of us are japanese speaking weebs, subtitles bro 
we need them Thanks!
we need them Thanks!
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Sorry 'bout that. I actually was going to translate it this update, but and I put the words back in Google as romaji "Japanese words in English alphabet" it would not translate it correctly, so next time!SuperWriter please remember not all of us are japanese speaking weebs, subtitles bro
Spatenklopper
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WTF guy´s, i thought that was intentional and part of the story, because I was sitting in front of the computer just as confused as the MC was in front of the Japanese.
And now you say that it wasn't an intention at all?
Vidal the king of Pervert
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actually it makes more sense for us not to understand it so we can feel how the MC is feelingSuperWriter please remember not all of us are japanese speaking weebs, subtitles bro
Spatenklopper
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Aaaaannnnd we have Irene with us for the most necessary translations
WTF guy´s, i thought that was intentional and part of the story, because I was sitting in front of the computer just as confused as the MC was in front of the Japanese.
And now you say that it wasn't an intention at all?
I know, I know but my OCD is driving me nuts not knowing what the hell they said, I love the imersion of it but its driving me batty thinking about it as well.....
Spatenklopper
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Not being a gammer Na*i but the proper word is Then not ThanThan.................................... learn japanese
and since SW probably already has the original english translation somewhere that will take much less time than me learning japanese would XD
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Not to be an even bigger grammar nazi, but I believe he was correct in using 'than.' You use than when comparing things. So, I'd rather do this THAN that. 'Then' is used with time.Not being a gammer Na*i but the proper word is Then not Than
And I debated having the English translation for emersion purposes like Pervert mentioned, but Irene does explain the gist of what every Japanese conversation is. I will probably leave it as an option next time!
But it wasnt a comparison it was temporal, basically saying "If you want to understand it THEN learn Japanese.", as opposed to "I would rather read English THAN Japanese." I am all for an option, like i said it's an OCD thing for me.
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Oops, I misread what he said xD Thought he was saying I'd rather learn Japanese, not telling someone to go learn it. You're right, but yes, I will make sure I had the option next time, for sure.But it wasnt a comparison it was temporal, basically saying "If you want to understand it THEN learn Japanese.", as opposed to "I would rather read English THAN Japanese." I am all for an option, like i said it's an OCD thing for me.