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Suggestions are hard because they'd be mostly subjective opinion, though I can certainly do that. I only have 1 or 2 that I think would be worth pointing out:
1) Lea strikes me as a breath of fresh air in regards to a female protag on this site. I.e. she's not a skinny giant breasted moronic bimbo walking around without 2 brain cells to rub together. I like her model and her character so far. I would run with that.
Keep some wit and cleverness about her (the fact she mains a mage might help reinforce this as subtle background flag in this regard) so that she remains a refreshing change of pace from the dime a dozen corrupt the idiot bimbo games on this site.
Not to say sluttiness/lewdness should be avoided obviously, just make her clever about it, or at least fully cognizant of the situations that lead her to being in those situations. Maybe, through her perceptiveness (or as Archer puts it: 'Keen situational awareness') she discovers some mischievous situation someone tried to force her into to get her naked, but acts ignorant because she thinks the plotting was adorable, the girl is cute, and is curious.
I don't know, the point, as a long term development, is she doesn't mindlessly drift from being helplessness scene after scene as a result of the air in her head lol. Way too much of that going on around here, I'm personally sick of it.
2) I haven't actually finished to end of content yet, but I didn't catch an overarching motivation for our heroine. Are there any plans for something like an antagonist to overcome? A mystery of her past to solve? A life goal to achieve before an imposed time limit?
Doesn't really matter, but adding a reason for her to get out of bed every morning aside from 'it's time for school' might draw in more people in the long term, invest in her life and story more.
Though frankly, a competent lesbian protagonist is already reason enough for a lot of people to stick around lol.
Wow, thank you for the feedback! That's a lot more than I expected, and I love it!
Considering 1:
That's pretty much exactly what I'm trying to go for with her character, I just never really thought about it or put it into words. Now that I think about it, the problem with many female protagonists seems to be that they were created as "tools" fit for the situation the authors had in mind. So, situations > characters.
Personally, I had the characters in mind before I even started writing any kind of scene, and I'd like to believe that the result of that is a game where the events "grow around" Lea instead of making her fit into them by removing her ability to, well, think for herself. Ergo, characters > situations.
Please, hold me to this standard, because I do not want my pride to be unfounded.
Considering 2:
It hasn't been mentioned yet, but she certainly has a goal. It's more of a "slice of life"-goal though, so maybe not exactly what you meant. She's basically just trying to enjoy some carefree time before she enters the working life to pursue her dream career - which will almost certainly be a sequel that's already forming in my head during sleepless nights.
No mysteries or antagonists, except for a few event chains that are more or less isolated from the main plot. But you make a great point, and I will give her dreams and aspirations a higher importance in the story I've planned. The story itself won't change, but I will try to give the players more insight into her character. I tend to forget things like that, because it's all clear and set in my head.
Thank you again for the detailed answer!