So, I've played up to the point at which the game opens up. Pretty fun game so far. I like it.
I've noticed only two problems with it. First and foremost, grammar. While I don't think I saw any typos, the grammar in this script is absolutely in shambles. Tenses are often incorrect. There are mixups with much/many, this/these, that/those. The 's' at the end of verbs in 3rd person singular is missing some times, and sometimes attached to words that shouldn't have it. Progressive tenses are sometimes wrong, too. And the affirmative "I am"/"I do" gets mixed up a lot, as well. Plurals are sometimes just written as singular ("Her eye is big"), and a few times, the other way around ("elves cult").
I could probably go on a bit longer, but basically, this needs a massive proofread.
The second problem is a minor continuity issue. During the bath with Mira, MC thinks to himself that he had sex with her in his dream, even if said dream was cut short by him pinching himself. A similar reference to that dream comes up during the hug with the princess.
To end on a more humorous note, I find it interesting that the Character screen describes me as "a Nobody" who is "strong enough to walk", "used to be a smart kid", has zero charisma, "a descent hand-eye coordination", and who's "not a bad person". That describes me very well IRL.
PS: Since someone brought up the foursome dream, I guess I'll comment on it a bit, too.
In my opinion, sex dreams in games like this are nothing but spoilers. You get to see characters naked before you should, and somehow they happen to look the exact same in the dream as you will see them later on in the story (though with changed hair color in this game), which you'd think is really unlikely if MC hasn't seen them naked before. And you get to "the good stuff" without any of the buildup that makes it worth it.
I'm frankly very happy that the foursome dream was optional, and I, for one, have no intention of reading it.
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