Soooo...
finally through with the DeLuca Family.
And i can only compliment you
HopesGaming
Well written, a unique take on the AVN perspective and very diverse and enjoyable characters.
I really like that you don't scuttled away from using hard stuff when telling the tale, the best example by far, Lunas Story, to deepen the darkness of the Mafiaworld.
Luna is well crafted. Comes of at first as a pure nutjob but what lies underneath... loved it. You really managed it for me to bring out a broken Girl, that is a perfect mixture of the little crying girl, from when her childhood ended and the growing young adult trying to find her place in a horrible world.
The very special scene at the End with her nailed it for me. I bet you know which one I mean. In "My Name is Luna".
Besides all Darkness, you didn't forget to sprinkle some humor on the mixture. I love the dryness of the "Uncle". Loved the old man right from the start.
"But then it got to me, I don't know anything about cars so why should I even bother looking."
Wonderful.
As for Gracie... She is interesting too, but sadly pales against Luna. I like the rather straightminded genius approach on her. And the way to get closer to her made me laugh more than once. But still... Lunas Background is a lot more captivating so far.
As Suggestions for improvement I really missed a better hintsystem. It got a bit stressful with the eavesdroprecorders for example, as it states "wait a few days" but not how many. So I started just hitting the hay for a whole week and tried again
Additionally, the Contractinterface feels a bit clunky. Too many steps to feel comfortable and after a done contract you need to click "back" kind of 4 times. Maybe I missed the oneclick close the contractmenu button somewhere? Overlooked it? If not, I'd love to get one for speeding up earning money etc.
Last but not least: Not a point of improvement, but I need this Room to visit Cordia... She is the one woman in this house that got me right from the very start. That silent attitude, the way she handles situations, everything. I'd love to even get a way to start romancing her, which, imho, is kind of pointed at from you within the game, but we don't get closer to her as she is not reachable behind Uncle gramps.
5/5 for me despite minor annoyances. I really enjoyed your game. Pls keep up the wonderful work!