- Thread starter TheGreys
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- Aug 27, 2017
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A patch so Haley's path doesn't get locked even if you do everything right.
The same happens with the version downloaded directly from Patreon.
no idea about this update yet but for me the last 2 it got better and better especially the last one. Might just not be your cup of tea.
Alright, I'll try to be more constructive.
It seems to me that the author didn't have a clear idea of the story from the beginning and is improvising a bit. My advice is to write all the narrative archs before developing the AVN.
There are also several problems with how the adult scenes are built.
There are too many characters that interfere with the stories of potential LIs. You don't see a character for half an hour then suddenly you meet them again and the relationship move ahead so quickly that you tell yourself "wow, that's a quick progression!".
Also, I like the casual sex but it lacks pathos and eroticism.
Man I know it's casual but this is just shallow.
My advice to improve a litte: try to focus on the most important characters, describe their feelings, write some dialogues with the MC where we can get an insight of what are they feeling.
In my opinion, the story isn't a progression of things the MC must do but a narration of how the relationships are built and progress then you build the story around this.
I hope this gives the developer some things to think about because I like this project and I don't want to see it descend into mediocrity. It's a 4 star rating on here which is already below the good quality treshold, let's hope it doesn't go below 4 stars.
It seems to me that the author didn't have a clear idea of the story from the beginning and is improvising a bit. My advice is to write all the narrative archs before developing the AVN.
There are also several problems with how the adult scenes are built.
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There are too many characters that interfere with the stories of potential LIs. You don't see a character for half an hour then suddenly you meet them again and the relationship move ahead so quickly that you tell yourself "wow, that's a quick progression!".
Also, I like the casual sex but it lacks pathos and eroticism.
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My advice to improve a litte: try to focus on the most important characters, describe their feelings, write some dialogues with the MC where we can get an insight of what are they feeling.
In my opinion, the story isn't a progression of things the MC must do but a narration of how the relationships are built and progress then you build the story around this.
I hope this gives the developer some things to think about because I like this project and I don't want to see it descend into mediocrity. It's a 4 star rating on here which is already below the good quality treshold, let's hope it doesn't go below 4 stars.
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I'm going to say it's the price to pay for updates taking so long to come out. They needed a sex scene with one of the LI and Kelly had to do since it was easier to justify story-wise, everyone is still in her path, she had never had a sex scene before, plus it still leaves people wanting for more with other characters like Haley that I feel are more popular. Sure, it could have had at least more buildup within the episode itself, but I think the scene was more shoehorned than planned and that's the result.
I enjoy this game, but really, the way the sex scenes are written, as in the dialogue while it's happening, is just not good. It feels like all the scenes are a version of the classic "MC, I love your big cock, fuck me with it, fill my pussy" poor smut writing you can find in a lot of bad fanfics.
As you say describing the feelings, sensation and so on would make things better since we can already see the action and we don't need a description of it.
- Jul 5, 2021
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are you compressed for ep 5? i don't find any compressed for this game from search feature (i setting with Relevance).
- Jul 26, 2023
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I searched by Member using SonsOfLiberty and it was there.
https://f95zone.to/threads/the-grey-dream-ep-5-thegreys.125324/post-14496360
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I use the Universe Renpy Mod. It's not a walkthrough mod per se, but it let's you see the consequences of every choice so it does the trick. Plus, since it doesn't modify the save file unless you manually do it, you don't need to wait for it to be updated once a game update is released.
There. Fixed it for you newbie. You're welcome.
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