VN Ren'Py Abandoned My Ordinary Extraordinary Life [Ch.12] [Cheepshot]

[Spfjolietjake]

He has a fucking army.

I don't know where you got that i'm sickened by it, i'm pissed off with Demi's absolute character assassination, that's all. It could have been any character but he fucked over the one badass.

How is he not useless?

He knew what was going to happen to his cousin yet did nothing to keep her safe, he knew they were around and looking to kidnap her and just let her wander around on her own.

Demi has also been gone for many months by now yet he's not looking for her he's just sticking his dick in what's left of his harem.

Now we're on the third member being raped, how many is the dev planning on getting kidnapped because it's getting old.

I'm not bothered about Demi being raped, i'm bothered about being turned into a drooling mindbroke cumdump. Stop reading what isn't there. You of all people should know that shit doesn't bother me.

All I give a shit about are story and characters and the dev is doing his damn best to try and ruin the main characters and I don't see any gain story wise.

I didn't aim my words at you. I said those of you that were sickened. Yes I know you have a high tolerance for certain content. My point is I don't see how this vn will ever make those that are sickened happy again.

Your posts are quite understandable.

I however did not think that he had a army but that the red queen was controlling the shots. If he went searching hell with a small army I really don't think he would have survived as they are just finding out where the slut turned broken slut Demi is being kept.

Is there any possible way you would be happy with this vn again? I don't really think so, for you and several others... but I would love to hear what it would take.

I personally just want to see what happens next

Edited: I meant WITHOUT a re-write of the vn. I meant going forward, I don't see how it can be changed to appease those dissatisfied...

 

[Spfjolietjake]

Some actual concern from the MC?
A glimpse of the heroic guy he was supposed to be, and is infact EXPECTED TO BE?
Some actual effort to ensure the safety of the people he supposedly loves?
A plot development that doesn't include, the now overuse, kidnaping and raping of a LI?
To finally get Demi out of her captivity, a plot that went for so long that completely assassinated her character?

I can think of a few dozen ways this VN can "Make people happy"

The VN obviously was not for everyone do to its abundance of fetishes, but still, the VN had an actual PLOT, and actual CHARACTERS, and now we have neither, just an imbecile for an MC, and a harem of victims just waiting to be raped.

If you had bothered to actually SEE what people are saying, you would understand this.

Wow if I found that much fault with a vn I sure wouldn't be wasting my time playing it or posting in it's thread. I guess some people are just masochist that way...

 

[anonuser1999]

I didn't aim my words at you. I said those of you that were sickened. Yes I know you have a high tolerance for certain content. My point is I don't see how this vn will ever make those that are sickened happy again.

Your posts are quite understandable.

I however did not think that he had a army but that the red queen was controlling the shots. If he went searching hell with a small army I really don't think he would have survived as they are just finding out where the slut turned broken slut Demi is being kept.

Is there any possible way you would be happy with this vn again? I don't really think so, for you and several others... but I would love to hear what it would take.

I personally just want to see what happens next

Edited: I meant WITHOUT a re-write of the vn. I meant going forward, I don't see how it can be changed to appease those dissatisfied...

for me it would be for the Dev to find a way to explain how Demi can come back to the fold that is explainable.... I cant think of any ways but given magic is in play its possible but i think the most frustrating thing is that Demi has dragged on way too long i was hoping for a resolution in the last release but for it to just continue really screws up the character she was especially with her backstory... Fingers crossed this chapter we have something that can explain it all...

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[Norman Knight]

Wow if I found that much fault with a vn I sure wouldn't be wasting my time playing it or posting in it's thread. I guess some people are just masochist that way...

You have the uncanny ability to see only what you want to see, and understand only what you want to understand.

I liked this VN until the last few updates, I said so before, you can find fault with a piece of media and still keep watching to see if it gets better or not.

People loved Game Of Thrones until the season 8, were they masochistic for watching all the 6 episodes?, or maybe they already invested time in that show and wanted to see how it all ends, no matter how terrible it might be?

And in case no one told you, this is a public forum where people share their opinions about a game, both as a personal observation and as a reference for future players, if you don't like to see such comments, then perhaps this place is not for you?

 

[Spfjolietjake]

for me it would be for the Dev to find a way to explain how Demi can come back to the fold that is explainable.... I cant think of any ways but given magic is in play its possible but i think the most frustrating thing is that Demi has dragged on way too long i was hoping for a resolution in the last release but for it to just continue really screws up the character she was especially with her backstory... Fingers crossed this chapter we have something that can explain it all...

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Thank you for your well written non-condesending response.
This is exactly the kind of answer I was looking for. Also not too shabby of a plausible fix imo at least on the Demi issue

 

[-CookieMonster666-]

Also not too shabby of a plausible fix imo at least on the Demi issue

This is exactly my thinking. Normal people would never possibly recover from Demi's current state of mind: mindless, sex-driven slave with Stockholm Syndrome on crack. I see absolutely no possible way for her ever to be even a partially functional person again without magic being involved. And even then, it would depend on how it's handled. I can only suspend my disbelief so far. I suppose we'll see. I absolutely loved this game before, and I still like much of it.

But the writer in me severely struggles with plot twists that, as of right now, seem to have no purpose and, as Avaron said very accurately, destroy multiple characters: Demi no longer feels like the great warrior she was supposed to be; the MC no longer feels to me like the self-sacrificing nobility he's supposed to have been; and Jena's apparent love for Demi hasn't prompted her to mobilize anything to find her "sister".

Call me hopeful and now more neutral than anything on the game overall, but I'm not sure how much longer I can take the cluelessness of the MC and extreme trust in power(s) that apparently have done next to nothing to save or even find the missing women. I don't believe the MC himself should try to find Demi, since he knows very little about any realm other than earth. But he can sure as hell try to find Linda, like he did for Karen earlier. He can also be a tad bit wiser when a threat to one of his girls is clearly present.

And there are so many characters in the game, I'm struggling to understand why it doesn't feel like more effort has been made by those in other realms to find the missing Demi. The MC may be the promised king reincarnated, but given how important she was to him in the past, wouldn't High Priestess Damara — who supposedly loves the MC so much and fully accepts his having a harem — do what she can to expend resources to find and save Demi?

On this latter point, maybe Cheepshot has tried to show us that Demi was nearly impossible to locate. But if that was the aim, I feel like he failed at it, and quite badly. I never felt like anyone was searching for Demi. It only felt like, "Oh, well. She's got to dig herself out of her own hole." That's a pretty shit way to behave if someone you love is grieved over the loss of someone else they love. Add on top of that the MC almost never asking about Demi or spending time preoccupied over the missing mom — crying, alone in thoughts, having nightmares, whatever — makes me doubt his feelings for Demi at all.

I guess, in summary, I'm just lost as to what the hell Cheepshot is trying to do with the story now. Is there some moral I'm missing, like "even the best warriors can be brought low" or "even the most loving people can be apathetic to their loved ones"? I just . . . I'm confused and a little frustrated. But I still for sure want to play, because I'm desperate to see the game pull its head out of its own ass and get back on track to a plot that seems to have been stagnating into sideline sorrow.

 

[Avaron1974]

This is exactly my thinking. Normal people would never possibly recover from Demi's current state of mind: mindless, sex-driven slave with Stockholm Syndrome on crack. I see absolutely no possible way for her ever to be even a partially functional person again without magic being involved. And even then, it would depend on how it's handled. I can only suspend my disbelief so far. I suppose we'll see. I absolutely loved this game before, and I still like much of it.

But the writer in me severely struggles with plot twists that, as of right now, seem to have no purpose and, as Avaron said very accurately, destroy multiple characters: Demi no longer feels like the great warrior she was supposed to be; the MC no longer feels to me like the self-sacrificing nobility he's supposed to have been; and Jena's apparent love for Demi hasn't prompted her to mobilize anything to find her "sister".

Call me hopeful and now more neutral than anything on the game overall, but I'm not sure how much longer I can take the cluelessness of the MC and extreme trust in power(s) that apparently have done next to nothing to save or even find the missing women. I don't believe the MC himself should try to find Demi, since he knows very little about any realm other than earth. But he can sure as hell try to find Linda, like he did for Karen earlier. He can also be a tad bit wiser when a threat to one of his girls is clearly present.

And there are so many characters in the game, I'm struggling to understand why it doesn't feel like more effort has been made by those in other realms to find the missing Demi. The MC may be the promised king reincarnated, but given how important she was to him in the past, wouldn't High Priestess Damara — who supposedly loves the MC so much and fully accepts his having a harem — do what she can to expend resources to find and save Demi?

On this latter point, maybe Cheepshot has tried to show us that Demi was nearly impossible to locate. But if that was the aim, I feel like he failed at it, and quite badly. I never felt like anyone was searching for Demi. It only felt like, "Oh, well. She's got to dig herself out of her own hole." That's a pretty shit way to behave if someone you love is grieved over the loss of someone else they love. Add on top of that the MC almost never asking about Demi or spending time preoccupied over the missing mom — crying, alone in thoughts, having nightmares, whatever — makes me doubt his feelings for Demi at all.

I guess, in summary, I'm just lost as to what the hell Cheepshot is trying to do with the story now. Is there some moral I'm missing, like "even the best warriors can be brought low" or "even the most loving people can be apathetic to their loved ones"? I just . . . I'm confused and a little frustrated. But I still for sure want to play, because I'm desperate to see the game pull its head out of its own ass and get back on track to a plot that seems to have been stagnating into sideline sorrow.

This, all of this.

And therein lies the issue with Demi. No matter what happens from here on her days of being that baddass warrior are finished. Even if they use magic and manage to restore her, the enemy know what happened to her, the people that rescue her will know what happened to her so to both armies she's going to be that demons mind broken cumslut. Her character is done and the whole point i've been trying to make is, why?

What does that add to the story?

They are supposed to be restoring his forces to go to war and fix the banishment they suffered when they lost the last one and one of their best warriors has been mad useless, he's been portrayed as incompetent, Jenna saw who kidnapped Demi yet nothing came of it, enemies have invaded the queens fortress since pretty much the start of the game yet these supposedly powerful people know nothing.

I can see why they lost and ended up banished.

The story has suffered for the porn. He's more interested in getting his dick wet which is great for the porn side of things but for being the reincarnation of this super awesome guy people once either loved or greatly feared ..... he's shown nothing but the inability to protect his women.

To be honest, this past couple of updates look like the dev has run out of ideas and he's winging it. We're on our third kidnapping, one that shouldn't have happened full stop, and it feels like he keeps going back to this. It just keeps happening. At what point is he going to stop acting like a frat house fuckboi and start being what they keep saying he is.

From my point of view, the entire harem should belong to the big red guy because he's been the only one doing anything.

The main thing the dev needs to do is severely tone down everyone saying how awesome the MC is because he hasn't shown it.

Thing is, I don't hate the VN. I have seriously disliked these last 2 updates and i'm hoping something major happens to balance out the bollocks. I'll even let the Demi thing slide if the dev deletes what happened with the cousin and remakes those scenes so they don;t make Jenna and the MC look dumb as fuck. "He's here to take her away, we must keep her safe" ... 10 minutes later she's in town alone and get taken .... I just don't get why the dev wants to make characters he's worked so hard to build up look so bad this far into the game.

 

[LWtbo]

No offence here but anyone that thinks this MC isn't inept and clueless in this game really hasn't been paying attention just like the MC himself hasn't.
The Dev put clues in his own game with reguards to at least two of the kidnappings and then had the MC Totally ignore them.

Dont believe me then play it again and this time please pay attention ot whats said.

Kidnap 1 the perp has been giving the police the slip from the moment he came back into the city.
His sister happends to mention to the MC a secret warehouse at the docs they used to play in when they were small.
Hmm wonder were he could be hiding?.
and where could he possibly be gonna take his victim???.
I think it was something like 3 days it took for that one bit of info to germinate for the MC and even then when he had fainally got address he had to have a sleep on it and yet when he did go look he still couldn't find it.

Kidnap Number 2 you would think by now its once bitten twice shy but aparently not.
As was pointed out he should of known what was gonna happen the perp tried to get her back legally'ish and when that failed and he left angry yet determined our Hero the MC seemed to think that was the end of it so no need to worry about her anymore right?.

Last Kidnapping now that wasn't really the MC's fault he didn't see that comeing how was he to know the bad guy could open a portal to his relm.
And the rlem she was taken to is a big place so asking the flying ladies to search for her makes more sence than wondering around blindly yes?.
After all he didn't even have a clue where to even start looking did he?.

Except what the hell was the bit on the roof when Sister killed the guard they left to stop her following.
what was the point of her getting that last bit of info about roughly where they where planning to take Mom if they where just gonna ignore it yet again?. the only thing that showed us is its not just the MC thats clueless abd inept.

Now dont get me wrong I love the game cant wait to see how it go's.
But if the Dev thinks he can redeem mom and turn the MC into a hero who actually cares and has a brain.
They really got their work cut out for them as this game go's.
The Mom is currently pointless in my book now he may as well leave her there atleast she seems happy.
but we shall see lets hope they can turn the MC into one capable of protecting his girls and while their at it him getting a brain.

Can't wait to see how this go's.
Just Sayin.

 

[Norman Knight]

This is exactly my thinking. Normal people would never possibly recover from Demi's current state of mind: mindless, sex-driven slave with Stockholm Syndrome on crack. I see absolutely no possible way for her ever to be even a partially functional person again without magic being involved. And even then, it would depend on how it's handled. I can only suspend my disbelief so far. I suppose we'll see. I absolutely loved this game before, and I still like much of it.

But the writer in me severely struggles with plot twists that, as of right now, seem to have no purpose and, as Avaron said very accurately, destroy multiple characters: Demi no longer feels like the great warrior she was supposed to be; the MC no longer feels to me like the self-sacrificing nobility he's supposed to have been; and Jena's apparent love for Demi hasn't prompted her to mobilize anything to find her "sister".

Call me hopeful and now more neutral than anything on the game overall, but I'm not sure how much longer I can take the cluelessness of the MC and extreme trust in power(s) that apparently have done next to nothing to save or even find the missing women. I don't believe the MC himself should try to find Demi, since he knows very little about any realm other than earth. But he can sure as hell try to find Linda, like he did for Karen earlier. He can also be a tad bit wiser when a threat to one of his girls is clearly present.

And there are so many characters in the game, I'm struggling to understand why it doesn't feel like more effort has been made by those in other realms to find the missing Demi. The MC may be the promised king reincarnated, but given how important she was to him in the past, wouldn't High Priestess Damara — who supposedly loves the MC so much and fully accepts his having a harem — do what she can to expend resources to find and save Demi?

On this latter point, maybe Cheepshot has tried to show us that Demi was nearly impossible to locate. But if that was the aim, I feel like he failed at it, and quite badly. I never felt like anyone was searching for Demi. It only felt like, "Oh, well. She's got to dig herself out of her own hole." That's a pretty shit way to behave if someone you love is grieved over the loss of someone else they love. Add on top of that the MC almost never asking about Demi or spending time preoccupied over the missing mom — crying, alone in thoughts, having nightmares, whatever — makes me doubt his feelings for Demi at all.

I guess, in summary, I'm just lost as to what the hell Cheepshot is trying to do with the story now. Is there some moral I'm missing, like "even the best warriors can be brought low" or "even the most loving people can be apathetic to their loved ones"? I just . . . I'm confused and a little frustrated. But I still for sure want to play, because I'm desperate to see the game pull its head out of its own ass and get back on track to a plot that seems to have been stagnating into sideline sorrow.

This, all of this.

And therein lies the issue with Demi. No matter what happens from here on her days of being that baddass warrior are finished. Even if they use magic and manage to restore her, the enemy know what happened to her, the people that rescue her will know what happened to her so to both armies she's going to be that demons mind broken cumslut. Her character is done and the whole point i've been trying to make is, why?

What does that add to the story?

They are supposed to be restoring his forces to go to war and fix the banishment they suffered when they lost the last one and one of their best warriors has been mad useless, he's been portrayed as incompetent, Jenna saw who kidnapped Demi yet nothing came of it, enemies have invaded the queens fortress since pretty much the start of the game yet these supposedly powerful people know nothing.

I can see why they lost and ended up banished.

The story has suffered for the porn. He's more interested in getting his dick wet which is great for the porn side of things but for being the reincarnation of this super awesome guy people once either loved or greatly feared ..... he's shown nothing but the inability to protect his women.

To be honest, this past couple of updates look like the dev has run out of ideas and he's winging it. We're on our third kidnapping, one that shouldn't have happened full stop, and it feels like he keeps going back to this. It just keeps happening. At what point is he going to stop acting like a frat house fuckboi and start being what they keep saying he is.

From my point of view, the entire harem should belong to the big red guy because he's been the only one doing anything.

The main thing the dev needs to do is severely tone down everyone saying how awesome the MC is because he hasn't shown it.

Thing is, I don't hate the VN. I have seriously disliked these last 2 updates and i'm hoping something major happens to balance out the bollocks. I'll even let the Demi thing slide if the dev deletes what happened with the cousin and remakes those scenes so they don;t make Jenna and the MC look dumb as fuck. "He's here to take her away, we must keep her safe" ... 10 minutes later she's in town alone and get taken .... I just don't get why the dev wants to make characters he's worked so hard to build up look so bad this far into the game.

No offence here but anyone that thinks this MC isn't inept and clueless in this game really hasn't been paying attention just like the MC himself hasn't.
The Dev put clues in his own game with reguards to at least two of the kidnappings and then had the MC Totally ignore them.

Dont believe me then play it again and this time please pay attention ot whats said.

Kidnap 1 the perp has been giving the police the slip from the moment he came back into the city.
His sister happends to mention to the MC a secret warehouse at the docs they used to play in when they were small.
Hmm wonder were he could be hiding?.
and where could he possibly be gonna take his victim???.
I think it was something like 3 days it took for that one bit of info to germinate for the MC and even then when he had fainally got address he had to have a sleep on it and yet when he did go look he still couldn't find it.

Kidnap Number 2 you would think by now its once bitten twice shy but aparently not.
As was pointed out he should of known what was gonna happen the perp tried to get her back legally'ish and when that failed and he left angry yet determined our Hero the MC seemed to think that was the end of it so no need to worry about her anymore right?.

Last Kidnapping now that wasn't really the MC's fault he didn't see that comeing how was he to know the bad guy could open a portal to his relm.
And the rlem she was taken to is a big place so asking the flying ladies to search for her makes more sence than wondering around blindly yes?.
After all he didn't even have a clue where to even start looking did he?.

Except what the hell was the bit on the roof when Sister killed the guard they left to stop her following.
what was the point of her getting that last bit of info about roughly where they where planning to take Mom if they where just gonna ignore it yet again?. the only thing that showed us is its not just the MC thats clueless abd inept.

Now dont get me wrong I love the game cant wait to see how it go's.
But if the Dev thinks he can redeem mom and turn the MC into a hero who actually cares and has a brain.
They really got their work cut out for them as this game go's.
The Mom is currently pointless in my book now he may as well leave her there atleast she seems happy.
but we shall see lets hope they can turn the MC into one capable of protecting his girls and while their at it him getting a brain.

Can't wait to see how this go's.
Just Sayin.

All of this

Very nicely put, and I agree completly.

 

[Lyve]

1 of the sisters gets raped.

The mother gets raped.

Recently the cousin was added to the rape list.

All unavoidable.

-___-

 

[Ursus4321]

The problem I see here is that since it is a game without real options (if you don't choose the correct one, the game ends) when they rescue the mother they will simply accept her without questions and that's it, all forgotten. They may even bring the futas since the mother right now loves them more than anyone else. And we won't be able to do anything at all, whether we like it or not. And I am not referring only to the futa issue, if not to everything that has been said

 

[Spfjolietjake]

The problem I see here is that since it is a game without real options (if you don't choose the correct one, the game ends) when they rescue the mother they will simply accept her without questions and that's it, all forgotten. They may even bring the futas since the mother right now loves them more than anyone else. And we won't be able to do anything at all, whether we like it or not. And I am not referring only to the futa issue, if not to everything that has been said

I don't see that as a problem, but I also don't think that will happen and the slut Demi also is in love with her cell mate.

Nothing will make those that hate her broken self now to love her later. For most her character is wearing a Scarlett letter and is dead to them...

I am curious to what will happen but mainly just want more vn and the insane kinks...

 

[Osamabeenfappin]

Wow if I found that much fault with a vn I sure wouldn't be wasting my time playing it or posting in it's thread. I guess some people are just masochist that way...

I've hate watched shows,and I've hate played Van's.

 

[michael1984]

Well i dont dislike the game

And thank god we have plenty of women to be in the harem

But demi the futa loving mom is dead to me ... Just simply she been brainwashed and fucked to oblivion by them futa ladies

So she been ruined as a potential love interest for the MC

Will i mind getting her back not really ...But she wont be my love interest anymore

I rather keep her locked up were she is imo ... Since she clearly given up and enjoys the treatment she getting there..

So imo the MC shouldnt even have to set up on a rescue attempt

He should just relax with the rest of his harem and forget about his mom

But whats probally gonna happen is we gonna save Demi and we will be having a happy reunion like nothing happend

And we wont have a choice to neglect her even if she is back

 

[Osamabeenfappin]

Well i dont dislike the game

And thank god we have plenty of women to be in the harem

But demi the futa loving mom is dead to me ... Just simply she been brainwashed and fucked to oblivion by them futa ladies

So she been ruined as a potential love interest for the MC

Will i mind getting her back not really ...But she wont be my love interest anymore

I rather keep her locked up were she is imo ... Since she clearly given up and enjoys the treatment she getting there..

So imo the MC shouldnt even have to set up on a rescue attempt

He should just relax with the rest of his harem and forget about his mom

But whats probally gonna happen is we gonna save Demi and we will be having a happy reunion like nothing happend

And we wont have a choice to neglect her even if she is back

I was thinking the same ,MC should have some sort of,No,you keep her option

You break it,you bought it

 

[anonuser1999]

Well i dont dislike the game

And thank god we have plenty of women to be in the harem

But demi the futa loving mom is dead to me ... Just simply she been brainwashed and fucked to oblivion by them futa ladies

So she been ruined as a potential love interest for the MC

Will i mind getting her back not really ...But she wont be my love interest anymore

I rather keep her locked up were she is imo ... Since she clearly given up and enjoys the treatment she getting there..

So imo the MC shouldnt even have to set up on a rescue attempt

He should just relax with the rest of his harem and forget about his mom

But whats probally gonna happen is we gonna save Demi and we will be having a happy reunion like nothing happend

And we wont have a choice to neglect her even if she is back

Not really an option though within the premise of the game as the MC needs to find all of his loves for him to be able to save them all. If demi is left where he is then that is not possible and is game over. Based on the other ones she has to realise her love and consummate it for it to count so there would need to be a redemption there in some way or another. Hopefully it is one that makes some sort of sense though...

 

[v1900]

Not really an option though within the premise of the game as the MC needs to find all of his loves for him to be able to save them all. If demi is left where he is then that is not possible and is game over. Based on the other ones she has to realise her love and consummate it for it to count so there would need to be a redemption there in some way or another. Hopefully it is one that makes some sort of sense though...

The only sense we are going to get is that MC's magic dick will unscramble her brains in some miraculous way.

 

[michael1984]

Meh not really interested in a redemption path for Demi

I wont mind seeing her brought back tho for story purpose

But if there is a option to decline sex with her im all for it ... Since she been thoroughly ploud by futas

So Demi is welcome to come back but she can kiss her ass off a harem place good bye

I dont even blame Demi that much caus its been months that she was being captive ... And she had to for her survival but shes enjoying it a bit too much imo

So all that we seen in those scenes cant be erased with a simple im sorry from Demi imo

She can come back tho ... But she will have to stay with the futa ladies or on her own

Caus dont need a harem addition that we seen being ploud endlessly by futas

 

[Osamabeenfappin]

Not really an option though within the premise of the game as the MC needs to find all of his loves for him to be able to save them all. If demi is left where he is then that is not possible and is game over. Based on the other ones she has to realise her love and consummate it for it to count so there would need to be a redemption there in some way or another. Hopefully it is one that makes some sort of sense though...

I mean you could make an argument that Demi is no longer one of his lost loves,merely a breathing cock sleeve at this point.

 

[anonuser1999]

I mean you could make an argument that Demi is no longer one of his lost loves,merely a breathing cock sleeve at this point.

Not really because it’s not based off now it’s based off the past and his mission is to find his consorts of the past reincarnations and consummate their love… and if he fails it’s game over. Pretty sure they mentioned that when she got taken but it’s the complete lack of urgency or even if they can’t do anything they should be constantly thinking or addressing her absence… that’s the bit that annoys me the most…. Morna got taken …. He goes on a near suicide missions … mom gets taken and nothing happens for half a year or more….