OMFG.....
Entering the MCs name actually takes longer than playing this 'new & extended' version.
@ZL-Games
This is honest to god advice and not a dressing down. But really - try to not succumb to ambition and publish stuff prematurely. Most will understand your longing to be seen as a dev but this is not the way for you (yet).
Develop your story (maybe read about the 'three-act-structure' at
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) before writing dialogue, render some coherent visuals and try for some reasonable lines and thoughts (not: 'our mother told us she was not yet mature to be a dad.' -> really ?) It's not about typos, spelling and / or grammar but rather about your story making sense.
Take it as constructive criticism - you're up to a rough start already with this so circle your wagons and try to improve your game before publishing the next version
As for the visuals and story development you've come to the right place if you want to learn - if you really want to.
If you're looking for praise and admiration it's too early for that unfortunately.