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Keep in mind it is meant to be erotica too. As much as I'd like to do it as a writer, I can't really go too far into those drastic thoughts without it killing the mood. I still do it to some extent but I try to keep it at a level that feels thrilling rather than depressing (at least to those who understand the trope). I also created Casey's character to be pragmatic and accepting so that she'd see this situation as a challenge to overcome rather than a reason to give up and collapse into a puddle of self pity. She also needs to realise that a part of her likes it, or the story would start to feel a bit too "rapey". It's a fine line... Also bear in mind that the story so far has taken place over just 5 days and the blackmailer has kept her totally off balance so she hasn't had a great deal of time to do anything other than react to the situation at hand.First let me say this. I have not stopped supporting you. I also realize that you work hard every day for the project. The last thing I want to see is the project abandoned. I just feel like it's becoming a bit drawn out. Maybe its just me. I freely admit that I am stating my opinion and not quoting others. Maybe I am not being patient enough? Personally I would rather see a little more time between updates that results in more content at one time. Yes I know, 6 one, half a dozen of the other. In the end its all the same. I feel like there are elements to the story that need more depth as well. Each update just "feels" like things are just dragging along. Again, just my opinion.
I cant tell you what to do. All I can do is tell you how I feel the story is progressing. In the end, its your vision and your story and you should not change it just because one guy doesn't agree. I stand by what I say though in that it is my personal feeling that the story needs "something" at this stage. It needs more depth. Casey isn't a bimbo. She is clearly an intelligent person and an intelligent person wouldn't just blindly follow some strangers demands without working hard on her own to figure out who is doing things to her. Its especially important right now because Casey is now at a breaking point. A person going through what she is going through wouldn't be this calm. There would be drastic thoughts and feelings of desperation and hopelessness that would create thoughts of suicide. Think about this? Who would want to endure what she is going through for as long as she has. There would also be real and serious, anger especially towards her sister who has set all of this in motion. Its almost as if her sister no longer exists right now. She is/was fully aware of what Casey is going through because of her. Where is she?
That is what I mean by the story getting long and old. There needs to be more of a "human" factor to this story and in my opinion Casey is missing that "human" factor. As a reader I want to become emotionally invested in her. To feel her pain and share her anger and desperation. I feel like you have Casey in a vacuum. I do not say these things to hurt you guys or the story. I say these things in the hopes that you will close your eyes, think about Casey and say to yourself, "how would I deal with all of this"? Do you really think you would act the way she is at this point? We are talking about an act that could alter her life forever. Acts that she may never recover from. Nobody could could be so calm and cool about things the way she is.
Finally.... I apologize for the Patreon statement. I didn't consider the factors you discussed. I will retract my statement immediately.
One thing I still kind of regret with the original story is the "day per chapter" format. That can feel a little like it's dragging on, especially if you're not completely sure of where the story is going, but it hopefully all comes together and makes sense in the end. This game version multiplies that factor to some degree because we're releasing it as we do it, and it usually takes us 2 -3 months to get through one of those "days", and now we also have other paths coming into play which multiplies it further. I am aware of that grind factor though and I am planning on future chapters being shorter in order to progress the story faster. For example, these early chapters had more detail with stuff like the photoshoots to establish what was happening in them but we won't have that level of detail for similar events in the future chapters. Also once the Game is completed, these earlier chapters should represent only a small but necessary part of the overall gameplay and story, and should feel more in context.